Really well done Bex. It's so much better than the original one ^_^ You're visibly improving with each piece that you do. Good job, really ^_^

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Thanks so much You helped out a lot!

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No problem ^_^ And I didn't do anything, you're the one who did it all XD

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Wonderful picture

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It does not allow me to write in the "critique" box as I do not have a subscription, so I will post my comments here.
I have to say, on my first glance at this, my initial thought was that your digipainting is improving. I think you are getting better at capturing flesh-tone as you are using more colours than just reds and browns, however, I feel this could still benefit from some colder colours. The purple you have incorporated into the skin has given a little bit of that but I think maybe some greens would help (if you look at your skin, you'll notice there is actually quite a bit of green in it!) and maybe some more yellows in the areas of highlight? Just make sure if you do add them they are subtle and you blend them in well enough so you don't just end up with a rainbow person!
I really like his hair, you've managed to create the impression of individual strands well. The little details such as the lit cigarette really add to the piece as well, which makes me think that even a few more such as fingernails or some more shading to accentuate the knuckles in his hands would also add to it?
I really like his eyes too - you are good at capturing expression through eyes, he looks really pensive.
Also, the anatomy is pretty good, even what I can see of his stomach, though there is some inconsistency with the broadness of his chest and how narrow his neck and arm are; they don't really look like they fit on the same body. Also, the heavy shading on the neck makes it look too concave - remember there should be an "adam's apple" in there! Also, his arm does not connect correctly to his torso. [link] That was the best picture (right-hand) I could find to illustrate how it works. There is a shoulder muscle (deltoid) attaching the upper arm to the collarbone and then the pecs sort of... extend out of that. I find it difficult to explain what I mean but if you look up "deltoid" on google I'm sure you'll find many other pictures to help you!
Also, the large sections of black are a little overpowering, especially coupled with the very bright highlights on the sheets. I can tell you were trying to go for a dark sort of atmosphere, but I think that would be better achieved with less contrast.
But overall, I do really like it! (I'm sorry if that comment seemed excessively negative...) You say you think his face looks too long but it is in proportion, so I reckon that's just because of some of the anatomical issues with his neck.

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Thank you thank you thank you, you're always so helpful with the critique! These are all things that were bugging me bug I couldn't figure out why, so you've just helped to pinpoint that for me, so thanks And it definitely wasn't overly negative XD That picture of the arm muscles will definitely be useful in the future, too XD Thanks again

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Thank you!

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No problem.

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Wow! I'm so impressed by this piece!
You've really been improving with your painterly shading style. Just the shading/lighting on this picture is so fantastic! This is just wonderful, fantastic work!

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